After she finds divorce papers, a desperate make-up artist goes to extreme measures to turn herself into her husbands ideal woman, but when she discovers that he actually dreams of becoming a woman she has to face what is really keeping them together.
What Richiev said.
The logline starts with one plot then at the end begins another this is confusing and the goal isn’t clear what increases the confusion. She either wants to keep their relationship or not needing to “face” something isn’t a goal but what she needs after facing the reality is a goal.
I think the MC has a great journey from becoming dependent on her husband to becoming independent. The divorce papers are a great catalyst to push her into taking one action which will eventually lead her to learn a lesson and become a better person for it.
I don’t think the plot needs anything more than that to make an interesting story. How about:
After being given divorce papers an insecure mack-up artists desperately tries to change her self to save her marriage.
Maybe add an antagonist the husbands new lover a transsexual person perhaps.
Hope this helps.
the story has a potential but I reiterate the comments above: you have to choose what story is the main story and write the logline consequently. It seems to me that there are two possibilities.
inciting event: divorce papers
second act: how to become his perfect woman thanks to her make up abilities
resolution: he wants to turn into a woman
In this case the logline should avoid the resolution but you should include what is the problem she encouters in the second act (without spoiling the resolution)
inciting event: her husband whant to turn into a woman
second act: how she will use her make up artist abilities? To turn her into a man?
resolution: she decides to turn completely into a man and love him as a woman or she learns that she has to give up and find a new man?
The two possibilities are interesting. B is very original but hard to write. A needs to find something to build interest in the second act.
Good luck with “Squeeze”!