After being brutally raped, A Lesbian Anti Abortion rights Activist must decide between aborting the child or keeping it. (FOR MEETUP REVIEW)

    Brutally Living

    Penpusher Posted on January 21, 2015 in Public.
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    I got your earlier versions via email so I think I see what you’re struggling with. With the logline above the decision, for an anti-A activist, would be a no-brainer so the conflict of your earlier renditions is missing. The problem I had with the earlier ones was I felt you had misaligned the motives of her partner and the rapist. Her partner must know she’s anti-A so she would be the supportive one. The rapist (especially if his ‘motive’ for rape was that she was a Lesbian) would be the one wanting the abortion for everything from financial (mandated child support especially if he is a rich SOB) to just not wanting any kid of his being brought up by two mommies.

    On a grammatical not, too many Caps. It should just be the one at the beginning of the sentence.

    Default Answered on January 21, 2015.
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      Too “tagline”-ish. Obviously, you know how it will end, so you should mention the action your main character needs to take to achieve that end, and put both in the logline.

      Logliner Answered on January 21, 2015.
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        This might flow off the tongue better: After surviving sexual assault, a lesbian pro-life activist must decide whether to keep or abort the baby,

        Default Answered on January 21, 2015.
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        My two cents: more at stake, (as long as we are throwing stones at our MC stuck in her tree)

        After surviving sexual assault, a lesbian pro-life activist must decide whether to keep or abort the Down’s syndrome baby.

        Default Answered on January 22, 2015.
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